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Literature
Guide to Writing a Critique
Guide To Writing A Critique (Prose Edition)
Writing is a special branch of art. Art is all about the visual, even with music and writing! However, the trick isn't in the flow of the paintbrush, but the flow of words. The picture must be described so that the reader can see the image with her mind, instead of her eyes. In this way, writing is a very tricky art and one is never done improving! Writers must help writers!
When you write the critique, try to not be mundane and sound disinterested. You can even be engaging during critiques! Every thing you write is practice. Be encouraging, because you don't want to come off as mean or ill-intentioned. Then, all the work you've put into helping will be wasted!
Now, on to specific categories!
Specific areas for suggestions on improvement include:
Grammar
Flow
Clarity
Writing Voice
Never forget to tell the writer what blew you away! We all need encouragement!
Grammar:
It is pretty obvious what s
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Literature
Jeremy's Escape
The Man
A fog of panic clouds his eyes as his boots sink into the thick mud. His hands jet wildly into the fog; they search for a steady branch to grasp or a vine to pull.  He can smell the withdrawing rain and taste the heavy air. The humidity has its sweaty fingers wrapped around his lungs. They clutch and grasp tighter with each heavy footstep, shaking and jerking his chest, making it impossible to take in any deep breaths. He begins to feel woozy, the once refreshing smell of the jungle makes his head spin. The smell is too sweet, and he is too hungry, tired, and hot. It smells like trees, fruit, grass, leaves, wet bark, and pollen. He feels nauseous as the enticing, but torturing, rank of the vegetation rakes his dry throat. His ears pound and ring, making it so that he can't even hear himself wheeze.
"It hasn't even been a day yet," he groans.
He looks at the sun, still high in the sky, and wipes his sweating brow. The blond traveler cannot even run his fingers t
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Literature
Heaven's Not Heaven Anymore
Heaven was soaked in blood, the sky red and smoke-filled. The angels feuded, because of God and God's rules. Nothing was the way it was supposed to be. Could "Heaven" still be called "Heaven"? When that one desired and sacred domain was defiled and corrupted by the cries of brethren, heaven wasn't heaven anymore.
Heaven wasn't supposed to smell revolting, with destruction filling every breath. Heaven was supposed to have blue skies and clean air. It was supposed to be the place that everyone yearned to escape to. As it was, Heaven was no better than Earth, with its qualms and secrets. Angels were not free to fly, without the fear of being thrown into the fight, just as civilians cannot roam the streets without apprehension.
Was there ever a soul that was free?
He looked upon the face of the friend, whose blood was seeping from the wound in his abdomen. He, the holy betrayer, Michael, stabbed the friend he promised to fight along side. He was the traitor among traitors. Was he, t
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Literature
Selfish
Selfish
I'm selfish.
I'm selfish cause I want you, and I don't want to share.
Others may see you, they may look at you.
But they must know, you are mine.
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Daily Literature Deviations- December 2, 2009
Daily Lit Deviations for December 2nd, 2009
We are proud to feature today's Daily Literature Deviations!
Please show your support by :+fav:ing this News Article
Don't hesitate to comment or :+fav: the artists for their hard work!
Poetry
Featured by: TheBrassGlass

"1988" by Amberlouie
A lovely coming-of-age poem.
Featured by: RunningBear5858

"Let's Breathe Fresh Air" by UnspokenSolo
A beautiful poem about starting over,
by replacing your breath and blood with new,
fresh ones. The imagery and simplicity in
this poem adds to the beautiful tone. An all
around lovely and hopeful read.
Prose
Featured by itsaki

"A Delightful Grin" by Strioch
A short piece about an old man,
who, like the child he chastises,
cannot help but to play.
Featured by: choirsoftheheavens

"Change" by ravenofroses
The effortless use of t
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Journal
The Dear Emotion Project
Intro
It's different for everyone, but everyone, in some way, has their own method of expressing how they feel or releasing the negative emotion that has built inisde them. Maybe it's drawing, painting, screaming, talking to oneself, crying, ranting, or a common one: journaling; the possibilties are endless.
DeviantArt itself can help express emotion for many artists. But then again, maybe even the enjoyment of visual art doesn't float everyone's boat. It happens. So those people go to journaling (usually) or writing. But then we face the same problem: you could love to write but maybe you still need a different way to let yorself out. This is my case anyway, and that's what inspired me to start this project.
The Project
This project is called the Dear Emotion Project, and what I have created is a journaling type method of expressing your feelings if visual art or literature isn't your expretise (or even if it is!).
The difference between journaling and "writing emotion"
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SpaceShipEarth Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2010
Would you like to join #LiteratureAnonymous?
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IsaiahS Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2010   Traditional Artist
" A very belated thank you "
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Midreky Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2009  Student Filmographer
[link] did one of the things you asked for. ^^ I will do the other one latter.
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punch-the-clock07 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2009
Thank You!
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Midreky Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2009  Student Filmographer
You're Welcome. i hope it helps ^^
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KneelingGlory Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2009
Thanks a bunch or the watch! :wave:
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PaperDart Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2009   Writer
:wave: Hey, welcome to :devart:! Glad to see you seem to be settling in well. :D
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punch-the-clock07 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2009
Thank-you!!! I'm still trying to get used to critiques...I've been critiqued before but by people I know and who know me...so I am still trying to get my footing...
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PaperDart Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2009   Writer
:D Yeah, it can be quite different, but once you get the hang of things it's very very fun!
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punch-the-clock07 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2009
I am just trying to learn not to take too much personally...
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